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I am writing to inform you that I wish to move into a new room next term. It is inconvenient that I and my roommate own the same room.
In the first place, I want to move because my roommate has an inconsiderate behavior. His friends constantly visit him then and there they make much noise. In the second place, He sometimes borrows my private things without asking me. In this condition, I found that I can’t pay attention to my studies.
One way to solve this problem is change my room. I believe you will agree with my suggestion. I would be grateful if you could give me a single room, maybe not in the same building but as near to my university.

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It is inconvenient that my roommate and I share the same room.(人称顺序要把第一人称放在后面,共同拥有房间用:SHARE)One way to solve this problem is TO change my room.His friends constantly visit him the...